The major criticism from the review was that the scheme seemed to be
“just a roof”.
You were advised to approach the ideology of the project with a grain
of salt – and focus on what you are proposing as an architect.
The continued presence of the sci-fi images was remarked upon and you
were asked to address, and develop, the significance of these for your
project.
Like Jason: what sort of proposition are you constructing here? What
antecedents might you relate your project to? How would it sit in a
history of related propositional architectures?

It is difficult to tell how much of the sentiment was against ‘the roof’ and how much was not being able to clearly distinguish the other programs within the project.

The focus of the ‘ideology’ refers more to the presentation I guess, how much time spent explaining where the project has come from etc. vs. the actual project itself. One thing I perhaps have not spent enough time thinking/talking about it the architectural intent of ‘the roof’ form, the idea of folded surfaces interested me because it gave a greater structural integrity to a thin medium, the type of material I wished to use to form the roof of the greenhouse, and also the folds could be used to catch, collect and channel water, as well as potentially also incorporating other passive design ideas. This idea of folded, triangluated surfaces then turned into the inner structural system, which perhaps at this stage is too ‘pipey’ I would like to suggest or re-assert it’s ‘surfaces’ rather than just it’s joints or edges, however I am thinking these ‘pipes’ won’t just be structure but also the servicing cores for both the aquaponics system and other systems associated with the other programs, ie, rain water, plumbing, black/grey water treatment, electricity, gas etc.

Sci-utopias, I guess I’m attempting to learn from the images and their ‘vistas’, to inject the curiosity and imagination of a sci-utopia, yet at the same time something that is believable. Difficult to quantify how this will happen yet.

The history, I will work into my timeline, a drawing/diagram I hope to include in my drawings to place the project in time, what needs to happen between now and then to make the project viable, it would be interesting to then, perhaps include other projects by other people (as there are many) along similar ideas (urban food production) in the timeline as well, to flesh out the past, present and future of food. I will start drafting up a version of this soon.